"Guess who finally got around to reading this!First off, the transition from Albee/Zahni's dream sequence into the present (or the 'present' flashback, timey wimey wobbly stuffs) was great, and had a lot of implications like we discussed earlier. I…"

"I always like seeing Albee's fishing family roots and appreciate the kind of humble stock he came from. And the racism prevalent in Altmer society is just so wonderfully layered in this chapter, even - actually, ESPECIALLY - with a relatively…"

"Epilogue to the prologue, classic, also-is that a JoJo reference?!"

"Textbook boiling point climax right here! I liked that you resolved mostly all of the plot points here. It was a good idea to do this in a short burst and leave yourself with fewer story threads to weave, keeping the overall narrative manageable.…"

"The tried-and-true motions of a good story arc are followed here, and it's a very well-executed buildup to the finale. The reader is left wanting to see who made it and what plan the characters came up with, and there's been just enough investment…"

" Loving this portrayal of High Rock politics! I like to spend some time there myself, but not from the same perspective. The flashback also gave the perspective character some depth that was missing in the first chapter."

"Reading this now that I have some free time. So that's what the Lamp Knights got up to before they had to deal with mask cults and cabbages, hmm (another cult lol)? The fight scenes were clean and occupied physical space, which I liked. The way you…"

"Like I said when I read the draft, I really liked the new complexity this gives to Vingalmo both in the context of the past narrative and the present-time narrative. Always a new layer to their hate when the…"